David Guinness

It is rough in some spots, though I can't at the moment think of what would improve it. Generally, I like the rhythm very much. The diction is appropriate to ...

I listen to a piece of music I'm working on to give me inspiration for my characters. I try to use objects when I can, but I usually don't have ...

Okay, Waffles. :D (Caradoc > Caradog > cariadus, Welsh for "beloved") Just thought that was interesting. ;)

Congratulations, Snoink!

It's okay... [referring to the doodle] there's not much detail. I like the grass, though.

Great story. Although there's quite a bit of dialog, as Nate said, it's done very well. The "readability" is excellent. Does the name Caraidus come from cariadus , "beloved" ?

Good poem, xanthan gum. I don't see any real issues with it. The diction and syntax seem well chosen. I really like some of the word pairings. I think you ...

I start basically all writing projects the same way- making an outline, and or just pre-writing, getting any ideas I want to include down on paper. There are plenty of ...

I really like your use of the last line, after mentioning it once before.

That's isn't quite what I said... But welcome back.

Welcome back, Sharty. Don't take offense. You've in the past received an inordinate number of responses considering you're "someone of such importance." However, that little piece of yours you've dedi

I like the green one, although there's something strange about the clarity. Some of the "strands" are less blurred than others.

It is a good poem. I see no issues other than what xanthan gum addressed. The topic is good, and you have approached it well.

I'm pretty busy this weekend, but I'll just try to critique whatever I get my hands on that's missing a review. A little fiction, lots of poetry.

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